Kia ora Toby, I like your original format for presenting your case about Rona and her behaviour towards Marama. Your paragraphs make one point clear: blaming others for things out of their control is not helpful. What is one more different point you could add to support your stance further?
I enjoyed reading your persuasive piece of writing because your stance was opposite to one that I had read earlier from someone else in your class. I liked the way that you presented your facts from a logical point of view and used it to strengthen your argument.
Kia ora Toby,
ReplyDeleteI like your original format for presenting your case about Rona and her behaviour towards Marama. Your paragraphs make one point clear: blaming others for things out of their control is not helpful. What is one more different point you could add to support your stance further?
Hi Toby
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your persuasive piece of writing because your stance was opposite to one that I had read earlier from someone else in your class. I liked the way that you presented your facts from a logical point of view and used it to strengthen your argument.